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对于留学申请者而言,准备留学文书是申请阶段最重要的工作之一。而对于留学文书,一个好的主题显得尤为重要。很多同学都希望有一个独一无二的essay主题,可是自己一提笔就犯难了,根本写不出来的节奏。一个好的essay主题不仅能吸引招生官的注意力,同时还能给你的申请加分。想完成一篇精彩的essay,除了提炼,我们还需要加工,达到和自己背景完美契合的标准。我们今天就根据具体的例子来聊聊如何进行头脑风暴、打造独一无二的essay主题。
申请essay题目很多时候会遇到-Topic of Your Choice。那么这个题目应当怎么写?我们一般常见的思路就是用一件事或者一个经历来写?那么除此之外还有什么其他思路吗?
在申请美国大学时,通常都会用到美国大学通用申请系统Common Application,在填写其申请表格时,大多数申请学生通常会选择撰写表格上第一个essay题目,即Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you,或者是第六个essay题目,即Topic of Your Choice。申请学生愿意用这两个题目来描述自己亲身经历的、对自己有深刻影响的一件事或一段经历。
针对第六个题目,除了用一件事或一段经历来写作之外,其实还有另外一种思路来写出优秀的申请essay,那就是仅仅围绕学生个人的某一、二项突出的个性特质,将学生个人的数段经历按照一定逻辑进行编排,完成一篇essay的写作。为让同学们对此思路有感性认识,笔者就结合数月前指导一名学生的经历,简单介绍一下这种写作思路,同学们在写作这类申请essay时可以参考借鉴。
那天,笔者与那名学生面谈,帮助她梳理个人背景资料,挖掘写作素材,谈话持续两个多小时。为挖掘写作common表格上长essay的素材,我问她有什么事让她感到很自豪,她讲了一些让她感到自豪的事,其中她谈到曾在语文课上做过一个口头陈述,是有关京剧的,受到同学和老师的好评。对京剧了解很多,是因为她曾在培训班学过五年多的京剧
我又问她是否遭受过磨难,她向我讲述了自己从小到大的种种不幸经历,其中因病导致她放弃自己业余活动的经历引起我的注意:小学时,这名学生曾苦练京剧,将来想报考中央戏剧学院当京剧演员,曾被选出来为外宾表演京剧,但练了五年后自己突患肾炎,在医生建议下不得不终止训练,京剧演员梦就此止步;痊愈后,这名学生喜欢上了游泳,苦练两年通过测试获得了两张国家认证的游泳证书,但又发现皮肤出现问题,查出患皮肤病,医生禁止她再接触水;之后,她选择利用课后时间到体校羽毛球队练习打羽毛球,期间曾参加区羽毛球比赛获少年组三等奖,直至上高中后由于离体校太远才终止练习。
听了她这段介绍,笔者脑海里首先感到这名学生确实有些不幸,厄运接二连三,但马上又意识到,她是一位顽强不屈的学生,也是一位做事认真、坚持不懈、勇于追求卓越的学生:她参加每项活动都十分认真地训练,并且一段时间过后都取得了一定成就。当厄运来临,让她不得不放弃一项活动时,她会很快找到另一项活动,并继续认真苦练,又会取得新的成就。根据她的经历,笔者按照她这些优秀的个性特征,将她看似不幸实则充分展示其亮点的几段经历串起来,帮助她设计了下面这篇essay的写作思路。她写出草稿后,又指导她认真修改,最终完成这篇essay的写作。下面,我们一起来看一下这篇essay,笔者在每一段后面做了简要的点评。
写作经验实战
Misfortunes and Me
不幸和我
点评:以common表格第六个essay题目为题撰写好的essay,最好能够加上一个简短精练、起画龙点睛作用的标题。
Last semester, I made an oral presentation in the Chinese class.All the classmates clapped their hands heavily after I finished. “How do youknow so much about Peking Opera?” A classmate asked me surprisingly. Hearingthis, my heart began to hurt. For me, Peking Opera was a precious memory, but Ireally did not want to touch on the subject with ease.
点评:essay开头很巧妙地将第一个misfortune引出来:作者语文课上做了一个出色的口头陈述,受到同学们的热烈欢迎。而一名同学不经意的一问“你怎么知道这么多京剧知识”,碰到了作者的痛处——京剧是珍贵的记忆,但作者不愿轻易碰触。文章最后一句留下了一丝悬念——为什么作者不愿轻易碰触?而这正是作者设下的诱饵,吸引读者一探究竟接着读下去。
When I was about five years old, I was fascinated by Peking Operaand I dreamed to become an Opera actress in the future. Then I started learningit in a training class. The class started at six p.m., so I had to go thereimmediately after I finished my school every afternoon, no matter it was rainyor windy. I practiced three hours there, then went home and had dinner at abouthalf past nine. I felt exhausted after every training class, but my skills insinging and performance improved quickly and firmly. I was once chosen toperform for foreign guests three years later after I learned it. I thought mydream was drawing closer and closer. However, on a day when I was ten, I wassent to hospital and diagnosed with nephritis. The doctor suggested I have agood rest and terminate my Opera training because it would make my body worse.I felt very sad about that, after all, I had been training for it for fiveyears. However, I had to give it up.
点评:这一段essay具体讲述了作者凭着最初对京剧的痴迷,五年间利用业余时间刻苦训练,训练三年后被选出来为外宾表演,这些都展示出作者对京剧的热爱以及刻苦训练取得不错的成就。就在作者对未来当京剧演员的梦想充满期待并为之奋斗之时,作者入院被查出患上肾炎,医生的忠告让作者京剧演员梦成为泡影。
Several months later, I recovered from the disease. To exercisemyself, I began to swim. In fact, myteacher once told me I was not suitable to be a swimmer. But I still practicedvery hard every day. Two years later, I obtained two national certificates.However, misfortunate came to me again: I got dermatitis and was prohibited totouch water. Sadness spread over me, but just for one or two days this time. Ifigured out another sport that I could play–badminton. I joined a badminton team in a sports school. So, I wentthere practicing for two hours every afternoon. I did not miss any class. Oneyear later, I took part in a badminton competition in our district and won thethird prize in the teenager group. After I entered my senior high school, I hadto terminate the training because the sports school is too far away. But laterI always play badminton with my friends when I am free.
点评:经过数月治疗,作者肾炎痊愈。为锻炼身体,作者开始学习游泳。虽然老师认为作者先天条件存在不足,但作者依然刻苦训练,两年后获得两种泳姿的国家认证证书。然而,厄运再次光临——作者患皮肤病,医生建议不宜接触水。但悲伤仅笼罩作者一、两天,作者就确定了下一个奋斗目标——打羽毛球。一年紧张训练之后,作者就在区里的羽毛球比赛少年组里获得三等奖。进入高中之后,由于离体校较远,作者不得不放弃羽毛球训练。严格意义讲,这第三次放弃自己的爱好称不上是misfortune所为,但也确实属不得已而为之的无奈之举。但也并非完全放弃,闲暇时,作者经常与朋友打羽毛球。
Sometimes I think I am not a lucky person, because misfortunealways visits me. I had to give up my Peking Opera dream first, and then myswimmer dream. However, I also feel great when I realize that I used to be awonderful Opera actress, a swimmer with two national certificates and a goodbadminton player. Furthermore, I find I can do everything well as long as I amdetermined to do it. And I am quite sure I will succeed a lot in the future.
点评:前面讲述的三个作者为之不懈努力奋斗的目标,最终都不得不忍痛割舍,这自然而然让作者联想是命运捉弄为难自己——有时候认为自己不幸运,因为厄运时常降临自己身上,先后不得不放弃京剧梦、游泳梦。但作者也充分认识到她的优秀——曾是一名优秀的京剧演员,一名拥有两张国家证书的游泳运动员,一名优秀的羽毛球选手,都与这些厄运密切相连。作者更加认识到自己性格的一个特点——只要下决心去做,任何事都会做得出色。而这也让作者确信自己未来会不断成功。至此,一个不畏厄运挑战、努力前行追求卓越、对前途充满信心的学生形象跃然纸上。
