破碎句的正确修改方式为:将从句的句号改为逗号;比如. Supposing that two of the group member’s duties are similar, such as writing an abstract of the essay and writing the introductionof an essay. It is likely that they are wasting time on doing the same thing.
这句话中supposing that 相当于为if, 一直到on essay,都只是从句,所以应该将it is likely that 前面的句号改为逗号,这个句子才能真正成为有主句的完整句子。
Supposing that two of the groupmember’s duties are similar, such as writing an abstract of the essay andwriting the introduction of an essay,It is likely that they are wasting time on doing the samething.
混连句的正确修改方式为:将连接两个独立主句的逗号改为句号;比如,Face-to-face communication is more efficient but sending emails is inefficient, Only by talking and discussing face by face can they avoid such a GOOGLE PRoblem.
这句话中 face-to-face communication是独立的一句话,only by talking and discussing也是独立的一句话,不能用逗号连接;只能把inefficient后面的逗号改为句号,才是正确的句子。
Face-to-face communication is more efficient but sending emails is inefficient. Only by talking and discussing face to face, can they avoid such a GOOGLE PRoblem.
4. 回述主题句;那么在每一步开展之前都应该有对应的提示词:解释如in other words/that is to say, 举例陈述:如if/suppose that/for instance, 主题句回述如:therefore/thus/as a result.
其次,缺乏对关键(解释:比喻事物的重要组成部分)词的细节描述:比如描述abstract和introduction的网站内容,以及用email低效的细节和face-to-face communication 的细节
再次,中间段的结尾应该是主题句的回述,而非另起一个支持观点。
最后,从语言多样性上来看, 文段较缺乏,把单调语言隐去,修改以后如下:
First and foremost, face to face communication is obviously more efficient.(简单句) In other words,(层次词) face to face communication enables each group member to be on the same page, explaining each member’s respective duty in a clear mannerwhereas sending e-mails can cause some misunderstanding of the responsibility.(并列句)Supposing that two of the group member’s duties aresimilar, such as writing an abstract of the essay and writing the introductionof an essay,by only sending emails to announce and assign the task withOUT(出局) face-to-face detailed elaboration on the difference between the twotasks, ranging from the structures, content, to key points, purposes,(复合(recombination)句+名词平行) it is likely that these two group members are wasting time in writing the same thing,not only causing the unnecessary repetition, but also lowering the efficiency of the whole GOOGLE PRoject GOOGLE PRocess .(doing形式平行)Undeniably,(层次词) it is face-to-face communication characterized by vivid description, instant responseand direct exGOOGLE PRession that can ensure highly efficient communication.